The mountain man and Randy
Posted: Saturday, November 21, 2009
by Cecil Nye
http://www.ironcooker.com
Winter is just around the corner and its time to get settled in. Big Jim Brown He as his Fire burning bright tonight, With that old dog Randy staring at the rack of "Pots and Pans". He knows its that time of day, But its been a long week and nothing to eat has been a way of life sometimes.
nothing but beans in the old [Cast Iron Cookware] tonight.
Jim knows the dog is hungry, and that feeling of his stomach rubbing his backbone is not a good one either.
but its just how things work out sometimes when you make a living in the mountains.
Old Jim is a trader and sometimes things are slow up here.
The post did not want his furs this time. it just was not the kind people wanted, They have started using the store bought fabric from the cities out east this year, and old Jim does not even have enough to even buy supplies for the winter.
Sorry old boy. Its going to be fish and green onions in the cast iron cookware tonight, I got to teach you how to catch one of them rabbits and bring it home. All the wile Randy is looking at them "pots and pans. Luck has always been with old Jim, But this time as he sat there looking at the Cabin he had built. Listening to the river run buy. watching the deer standing on the other side. He had his doubts.
Deer on the other side!
Oh Boy. Stand still Randy.
There is meat in the pan tonight. you just sit there and watch that old cast iron cookware.
As he ran back in the cabin door and out the back. knowing he had to be careful and quiet.
Randy spotted the deer too. his mouth was watering but Jim gave him orders and he was a trained mountain dog. Damn fine one at that. he was hungry but an order from Jim was an order to keep. Especially if you did not like the feeling of an old cast iron pot along side your ribs.
Soon Randy heard the shot. and then he knew it was his turn.
He would have to leave his wind chimes made out of them old pots and pans and go down to the river and help Jim. Randy was a big dog and strong. He swam the river and Jim tied a rope to him. together they got the deer back to the cabin.
Tonight old boy.. Tonight we eat like we are kings again.
You do not have to eat fish out of that old cast iron cookware tonight old friend. And I do not have to eat them wild onions mixed in with them.
What is that sound Randy? You here it too? No not the wind blowing them pots and pans. That twig.
There he was. not a big man but you could tell he was from a rough area. he knew how to not be heard in the woods, He let us know he was here.
He was a Trader too, From the camp on the other side of the mountain.
He had his mule and all sorts of cooking products, flour, corn meal, coffee.
And he was looking for furs that they wanted back in his camp.
Well Randy its his lucky day. We still have some that we did not take to our market yet!
Sit down old friend, grab a clean dish from them pots and pans, And after we eat we will see what i can spare to trade with you.
www.ironcooker.com< It was going to be our lucky day.
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More commentsHi Cecil,You sound like the next Mark Twain. Good story. Welcome to SearchWarp!Mark
Hi Cecil,You sound like the next Mark Twain. Good story. Welcome to SearchWarp!Mark
Welcome to SearchWarp Writer community.Thank you
Great Story - the only thing I'd change would to be placing some of the "thoughts" in italics... I like the dialect and think it fits! Welcome to Searchwarp! MarijoThank you very much
Back again for reader's club and still like this piece! MarijoThank you
Thank you very much
I loved listening to that good old southern drawl when I was in New Orleans. Welcome to Searchwarp.Linda DThank you. its one of them things that a person likes or they don't.
Thanks Linda, I am working on the next part. it should be in sometime today
Welcome to the Searchwarp Community, Cecil.Thank you
Hi Cecil, I am glad I found you through the reader's club. This is going to be a great story. You have a good imagination. Keep writing.I would just encourage you to go back through and fix the punctuation. For example, "its", should be "it's" meaning "it is". Also, a few of your sentences do not have the first word capitalized, and some of your words after a comma should not be capitalized. Some of your one line sentences would work more effectively in a grouped paragraph. I think this story is worth a higher rating and if you made these changes, I bet you would get a higher rating from the editors.When I was a new writer here, I received a lot of advice that has helped me improve and I just wanted pass it on to you. Many blessings to you! Teresa
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